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you look at me
with weary eyes, heavy sighs
you ask of me
to just forget the foolish lies
you buried deep
inside my mind
a troubled past
a troubled mind hidden beneath
your caressing grasp
your caressing touch
traitorously
reveals itself
a dream within a dream
a curse within a curse
upon your gaze I stagger
my being torn asunder
an old shadow
a breath devoid of life
a familiar face
a life without a breath
burns and lives on
inside my mind
time won't bring back
even if it can
the times long gone
the chance that was missed
as oblivion pulls away
moments and memories
a wish within a wish
a death within a death
upon your gaze I stagger
my being torn asunder
Farewell.
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This one is good, although I advise to minimize the use of adjectives and adverbs as these don't really "talk".
ReplyDeleteShow. Don't tell.
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ReplyDeleteANONYMOUS: Sorry, but I'd rather paint a picture using adjectives and adverbs. This is supposed to be figurative. As far as I am concerned, the "Show not Tell" rule only applies strictly to short stories and the like.
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